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> Sprinters of the Beyond, A sequel story after Hachioji events...
Rin
Posted: Feb 10 2012, 05:51 AM
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Hello...so like I mentioned before...while my PC is still recovering at "hospital", I'd have to work on something with limited access to applications that allow story-writing development. And with no plans at the moment for Day 4 onwards of Gunma 34's Tsuchiya Chronicles. Since the prologue is rather short, I'd just work on a bit of introductory details.

This will be a multi-media story, which means there will be some comic part, some illustrations and mainly literature format in story telling. smile.gif

What is the story about - The story is about the original 3 supportive characters in Gunma 34's Speed Legend Tsuchiya Chronicles, which originated from the Hachioji area's original casts, in other words; my characters that were included for Tsuchiya Chronicles. These 3 characters are the female characters that were close friends with the 2nd lead character of Tsuchiya Chronicle: Rei, Ryugu and Mion.

The story here took place 3 years after Tsuchiya Chronicles.

Here is the picture of them when in development of Tsuchiya Chronicles.

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From left, Rei Yamano Ryugu Karasuma and Mion Kagurakawa.

Who is the main hero/heroine - The main heroines will be as follow:

Rei Yamano (21) (Fairlady Z 300ZX Z32) - A cheerful young driver with hidden potential. Ever since she got entranced by Tsubasa Aramaki's driving, she has been wanting to drive a car for her own once she got her licence. She has been an outsider in the world of racing long ago, even now when she finally got enough money to buy a used Nissan Fairlady 300ZX Z32 from Arashiko Takeuchi's Regalia Tuning Shop.

But as she starts to drive seriously, she eventually become a fresh starting racer at the Shutoku Area after her graduation, spending most of her free time cruising around the roads at either morning, afternoon or night time.

For now, she can drive just about any normal cars at the moment, but she favors the Zs the most, due to her original desires of wanting a silver S130Z when she saw it once in since last year's events, but lost track of it ever since.

Ever since last 3 years, she's currently working as a part-timer at BLACKWINGS Body Tuning Shop, replacing Tsubasa after Tsubasa Aramaki resigned his position during his final race with Seiji Tsuchiya.

Development within 3 years: After Tsubasa left to the outside skirts of his own home, Rei has been thinking very hard about what Tsubasa mentioned;

"The Universe of Racing is vast in infinite."

For Rei, these words seemed to mean that there's an infinitely vast world waiting for her on this path she choose to follow as a racer, which begins to ignite the flame of a competitor for her as a racer. Hoping to see what awaits beyond the world that Tsubasa has mentioned about; she practiced everyday on the Shutoku Area to slowly improve her driving..and then eventually to mountain stages.

From inexperienced driving style to a refined basic; Rei drove her Z32 accordingly to race against casual drivers from time to time to see how much she has improved over her time as a normal racer.

Rei's driving skills were sharpened regularly everyday, while slowly developing in her own natural driving sense in knowing her own Z, even though after 3 years of hardwork, her efforts only paid off with her being a barely mid-level racer among others.

Sometimes she even went and try on some mountain passes on other prefecture areas to see how strong her driving skills are on the mountain stage instead of the usual highway stage.

For the first 2 years; her driving were very rough at the mountains, after working hard on the 3rd year, her mountain complex is slowly vanishing, making her a well-rounded racer between highway and mountain passes.

From the record of her 3 year driving life as a regular racer, she is currently holding over 70 victories and 60 losses.

Ryugu Karasuma (21) (Toyota Supra Twin Turbo JZA70) - A hyperactive young racer which has the ability to hear "soundwaves" of any car she race against to tell the situation of her opponents or her own. She is a fairly long time racer with strong adaptability to see the situation easily while adjust her own driving. After 3 years from Tsuchiya Chronicles, she has been practicing hard on the Shutoku Area to improve her own skills, particularly on windy road area such as the C1 as well as other roads with many curves.

After graduation, she is still working at her own father's tuning shop regularly to fund her own driving activities, becoming more independent.

Development within 3 years: After Tsubasa's last words mentioned to her before he left them together to pursuit a wider world, Ryugu believed that she too may have a chance to experience a lot of changes like how Tsubasa has gone throughout his years as a driver, from his debut to the mountain stages at Kanagawa then eventually to the Shutoku Area overall.

Ryugu desired these changes and wanted to race for stronger self-development, as she continued her racer life while racing against old opponents once more and meeting new casual ones that rose up in wanting to develop their skills; just like what she is doing now.

Ryugu has been racing hard on particularly the C1 area where she is now considered quite skilled in that area. From there she can now easily hear and recognize the sounds of her opponent cars without much difficulty, seeing as she hardly has any opponents there that she has yet to recognize. Yet realizing that she cannot move on without moving outside of the highway, she too sought for the mountain stages and see how good she is on the similar stage with Tsubasa.

Her mountain pass skills were developed to the point where she's slightly slower than Rei, but still maintained her strong competitive aura after one year of intensive training and constant driving on courses such as Hakone, Tsubaki Line, Nagao and even the Tsukuba pass on Ibaraki.

Ryugu is currently a mid-level racer with stronger highway knowledge on particularly the C1 area where she's currently best at.

She is currently holding a record of 50 wins and 50 losses.

Mion Kagurakawa (21) (Honda Integra Type R DC5) - A very reserved and somewhat strict female racer that started recently, much like Rei. She may be somewhat skeptical about racing others, but when it comes to accomplishments, she has rather high demands for herself and always aim for the best to be the best.

Compared to highways, she is more emphasised on the technical driving on mountain passes. She is still fairly competitive on the highway stage though, despite her preference on mountain passes.

Ever since Mion got sponsored a car by Raymond Yamazaki, she has been working part-time on a tuning shop that specialized in engine tuning called the Grand Scale Tune, which was opened recently around Hachioji residential area right after she graduated last year until now. The main reason was to understand more about car's internals and of course; to fund her racing activities. She's also currently studying in a prestigious mechanical-college from her school's recommendation due to her excellent grades in that subject.

Development within 3 years: Thanks to the last words spoken by Tsubasa before he left the girls on their own; she has been thinking hard of when to start her experience of a wider and bigger world in the universe of racing.

That's when she finally decided to start on mountain stages, similar to Tsubasa when he debuted his racer life. She wanted to experience the same type of energy and adrenaline that Tsubasa felt when he first raced, despite her being very scared and doubtful at first. She slowly overcome her fear of speed as time goes by.

Her driving style was very technical at first during her trial at mountain stages, but eventually she learned that unless she allows her feelings to do the driving sometimes, she just wouldn't improve as a true racer with his/her own car.

As she continued her practicing for the first year and a half since her beginning life as a casual driver, her complex of speed is finally gone and she wanted to learn how to take advantage on her desire for more speed experience after the mountain pass driving all the time there.

She has defeated a lot of opponents on touge stages such as Shiga Kusatsu, Ura Rokko and Happogahara, but she has yet to face anyone that she consider truly strong yet. On her 2nd year, she left the mountain stage since and returned to the Shutoku Area to practice on her high-speed acceleration skills.

Her third year is where she begins to grasp the basics of highway driving without compromising too much of her mountain-stage driving skills. Believing that she too can put her touge-driving skills in good use on highway and vice versa, she continued to experiment different methods using her DC5's basic modifications done for both stages' use.

She currently has 40 wins and 50 losses.

Well...that's all for now. I will post the prologue soon. Until then, thanks for stopping by. smile.gif


[ Post merged on Feb 10 2012, 06:19 AM ]
Finally, let's start things with a short prologue. smile.gif


Sprinters of the Beyond - The Beginning


Prologue

Tokyo, Shutoku Area at around 4 to 5 A.M. morning.

It was a cold and windy early morning at the seemingly empty roads of the Wangan; only seemed a few more hours away before sunrise, oddly enough the city remained alive still with many lights shimmering across the view, with some fireworks shooting out from some areas where it seems like there are always some sort of celebration going on everyday. The winds continued to blow gently...almost seemed like a refreshing breeze, and then a few dried leaves were blown towards a direction which lead to a figure sitting on top of a midnight blue car parked across the street's sideways.

As the leaf reached gently towards the free hands of the figure, the hand gently gripped the leaves as the figure revealed to be a blue-haired young girl. She gazed her blue eyes above the skies and finally the moon itself. It was almost morning, but the moon is still visible.

“Tsu-chan...I have finally started my life as a true racer. Are you still watching me from afar now?” said the girl as she turned slowly back to the roads. She was wearing long-sleeved blue shirts and a simple white dress with blackish blue pants under it and she is also wearing a Z-shaped earring on her left ear. From afar came 2 more lights arriving at a close distance towards her. There were two cars traveling at a rather normal pace, despite their appearances are that of race cars. The car showed up and revealed to be a jet black early model of Supra JZA70, and behind that car was a red Honda Integra Type R DC5.

“Ah, you both have arrived! I was waiting here all the time...honestly!” The blue-haired girl spoke with a big grin as she walked quickly towards the two cars which have stopped and parked themselves nearby the midnight blue Fairlady Z; the ZX300 Z32 model. The drivers of the Supra and Integra opened their car doors and revealed themselves to be girls too, which were at a similar age of the blue-haired girl.

“Yo! Sorry we took so long. One of the highway roads there had an accident involving three cars and two trucks, so we kinda got caught in a traffic jam. I am just glad we managed to slip through some slow traffic while escaping the bad crawl happening now at around C1 area.” The red-haired girl muttered; scratching her head much like a scatterbrain. She has matching eye colors with her own hair as she wore black and red shirt with a maroon-colored dress and black-red striped stockings. She wears a simple necklace with a red-star-shaped charm on it.

“No thanks to you, Ryugu. I knew I should've trook another route back then...that accident was a long time ago before we even decide to came and gather.” The short-haired figure spoke sternly; she is the driver of the Integra and she seemed a lot taller than both girls. She was wearing rather casually with purple and white dress. She also wears a necklace with a purple star-shaped charm hanging on it, similar to Ryugu's accessory.

“Well, it's good that we're all here now at last, Mion!” The blue-haired girl broke in, trying to put out any steam before fire even started between the two drivers arguing over such a trivial manner.

“Rei has a point...haha.” Mion laughed apologetically.

“Well then, now that it's just 2 hours away from sunrise...why not we have a friendly cruise at the Wangan before we talk about the recent events happening lately?” Ryugu suggested, as she cracks her knuckles with enthusiasm.

“Good idea...I was just trying to test the new settings that Takeuchi-san made for my Integra.” Mion agreed as she is also somewhat excited.

“Nice! Arashi-san really is amazing after all! I'd like to test my own Z too on the Wangan Line! Let's go, everyone!!” Rei immediately agreed as all three of them hopped into their cars and started the engines. As their cars started to move, the night sky started to lit up to a bluish black, signalling the coming of a new day coming soon in a few hours.

All three cars started to cruise down the highway road as traffic slowly build up after their cars left a moment ago...they're all eager to see to what awaits then beyond the Wangan Line soon at the rise of the sun on another day...as they cross the paths in the Shutoku Area on a new year...

Rei muttered in her thought as she smiled with her eyes filled with hope and enthusiasm of what is to come before their eyes soon,

"And so it begins...our very own story of our lives as true racers!"

"Please continue to watch us from afar, Tsu-chan!!"

- End of Prologue -

This post has been edited by Rin on Feb 12 2012, 06:16 AM
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Posted: Feb 12 2012, 05:13 AM
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Quite an amazing start, Rin. biggrin.gif

But don't you think the age of your characters are still kinda...too young for these sort of developments? I know you wanna go try lots of stuffs with your love of racing stories, but there should be a limit of wild you can let your imaginations go.

You can make them either went to 20 or 21 years old (Similar age of Tsubasa, but since Tsubasa has been driving illegally, so their skill range should be very severe.) Since that should be enough of timeline for slow and smooth development of Rei and others to become casual racers before they can start for real.

Also...since this is a prologue; there's definitely a lot of changes can be done before you jump into Chapter One. smile.gif

Just change their ages and the development they undergo during these years as drivers while Tsubasa is gone. (Is he gone from here or is he still going to appear from time to time?)

Until then; that's all the advices I can tell you for now.

This is really a good start, Rin. Just that the immediate development between two projects' timeline gap seemed somewhat bothersome. Expand that a little with a reasonable development; then it's all good. biggrin.gif

Hope this can help you. smile.gif
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Posted: Feb 12 2012, 05:21 AM
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QUOTE (クロイ @ 8 minutes, 36 seconds ago)
Quite an amazing start, Rin. biggrin.gif

But don't you think the age of your characters are still kinda...too young for these sort of developments? I know you wanna go try lots of stuffs with your love of racing stories, but there should be a limit of wild you can let your imaginations go.

You can make them either went to 20 or 21 years old (Similar age of Tsubasa, but since Tsubasa has been driving illegally, so their skill range should be very severe.) Since that should be enough of timeline for slow and smooth development of Rei and others to become casual racers before they can start for real.

Also...since this is a prologue; there's definitely a lot of changes can be done before you jump into Chapter One. smile.gif

Just change their ages and the development they undergo during these years as drivers while Tsubasa is gone. (Is he gone from here or is he still going to appear from time to time?)

Until then; that's all the advices I can tell you for now.

This is really a good start, Rin. Just that the immediate development between two projects' timeline gap seemed somewhat bothersome. Expand that a little with a reasonable development; then it's all good. biggrin.gif

Hope this can help you. smile.gif

Oh...a feedback. Thanks, Kuroi. smile.gif

Hmm...I guess I did went a bit too crazy with this project of mine while being paranoid of when will I ever get my computer back. Alright then, I'd try and make some changes here on the prologue and the character descriptions as well as introductory infos. biggrin.gif

For the development part, I think I'd have to think of something rather normal for them 3 first since they're still at the beginning stage here in racing (except for Ryugu since she is driving longer than both Rei and Mion together). I wonder what should I do...hmm...

And oh, Tsubasa and other Hachioji casts will return from time to time, but not too often. So there will be a whole different cast for this one, seeing as this story is about the girls. smile.gif

Thanks for the feedback once more...I'd try and make some simple editing here first.
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